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问好小芳,这首七律,整体不错,不足处,个别词句还待斟酌,如第四句,火用几丝形容不合适,慰孤鸿,也有点凑韵了,尾联,有点跑题了,喜燃奥运圣火,应该是人喜燃,也就是前分句的大使,这是说人,和火远了。个人看
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