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阳春白雪简评:问好同学,句意不错,颔联颈联对可。整体尚好,但个别字词句表意欠缺,再炼更好。
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阳春白雪简评:问好同学,首联起意有气势,让人如临其境,比喻也很形象,句意顺畅,不错。但尾联突然提起抢险虽然是想最后升华一下,但凸显的有些突兀了,继续努力!
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