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欣赏豆师佳作,平仄工整,格律准确,想象力丰富真乃神来之笔
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问好同学,前两句视觉静态描写,满塘荷叶数朵荷花形象的展现眼前,这里用“枝”稍觉不妥,转结转到嗅觉动态描写,衔接紧密,尾句表达稍欠通顺,瑕不掩瑜,很漂亮一首小诗,赞
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