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古典诗十五初级班第十七讲太白组作业帖: |
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问好我家萍萍!惜春惜时之作,惜而不伤,积极向上,赞!唯觉得纷飞句,承接的不尽如人意,也没给韶华句留出搭桥的桥墩,有断痕,我感觉应该是花落匆匆不容惜,方好比韶华流逝的。其它句子都不错!加油💪
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