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问好学友!起承两句漂亮,转句的“藏”字可酌。结句的“心颜”有点费解。初学点评,不对之处,还望见谅!
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问好尘寐儿:小绝清新流畅,情理娓娓道来。寓意深刻,尤喜三四句。孤烟才浅,觉得不染尘和澈澄身意思相近,有些浪费字啦,拙见,勿怪!学习啦
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