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词十四基础第九讲兰台组作业贴,点评老师单层:慕雪,双层:春花秋月 |
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问好诗友!格律无误。小词整体还好。结构合理,句与句之间衔接自然紧密。层次分明,寓意深远。个别词语还欠锤炼。加油!
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清衣诗友好!笺字出律。以后要养成自验格律的好习惯。整体看来,可总结为“三凑”凑字凑句凑韵。意境零乱,不知所云。加油哦!
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