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古典元曲一期小桥组第十五讲作业贴 |
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鸿鹄豪情老师点评:简评:起笔中规中矩,续文还好。驻马听,乔牌儿一段景文铺垫续文,带出思情,绮梦共游自然流畅。水仙子一段,长亭一句中远去一词可在斟酌。盼春一处见隔,废笔感觉。尾收尚可。文曲整篇还好,略显
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