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古典诗十五初级班第十七讲太白组作业帖: |
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问好小葵,前二描写的景色怎么觉得是仲春呢。并且前二和三四句之间气脉也断了,第三句转的比较突兀,合句慨叹岁月如流,与转句“吾之不惑”联系也不够。个见哈,说错千万不要见怪,继续加油
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