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古典诗十五初级班第九讲太白组作业帖 |
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冰月你好!小诗好美,读罢一种软软酥酥的感觉沁入心脾,赞!很棒的笔触哈。如果非得说点什么的话,诗句着力点偏于春雨了,调整个别词语即可。再就是翠眨眸,再想想,估计,这里也难到你了。再赞一个!
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