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古典诗十四期五律第五讲夏组作业贴: |
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远方老师点评:心无惧,描写不逼真,兔子胆儿就小,在把律诗当词写吧,串韵了。
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远方老师评:这律不错!描述生动形象,意脉流畅,但结稍微跑偏了,只局限到孙悟空那只石猴身上了
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