楼主: 碧荷听雨
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词十七初级班第十讲浣纱组作业贴 |
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夜雨耽霜冷,夜雨和后边写的有点不太搭,建议换掉,小词写感怀挺不错,此生此景就不必重复了,建议换词,不错,加油
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喜景写哀情,手法挺好,词写的流畅自然,不错不错,赞了
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