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词十五初级班第八讲白石组作业贴,评阅老师清幽8-20寒月21-33玫瑰34-剩余楼层 |
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寒月老师评:问好安吉尔。文是一种文学体裁,诗词上不要标。整阙词较好,不思归,有点不当,尽量换下,使准备过片和过片之间自然过渡更好些。
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