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古典楹联十六期青山组第十八讲作业帖: | 
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不错继续努力 
 
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还行,转折不明显 
 
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继续努力 
 
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时空流转不畅。(当年)二字再酌。 
 
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谁个/平时词性不对。 
 
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凭栏/落日词性不对等 
 
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上联是问句,下联做回答会更流畅 
 
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