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高级班溪山组第九讲作业帖 [ |
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浅析:此作立意不错,虽意在表达手足之情深,却以小见大抒发了诗者正义,向善,和热爱生活的情怀。鸡蛋挑骨头,说说不足哈,颔联的“边境”对“水乡”稍有不工。结句的富国 强,略显凑。
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