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鸿鹄豪情老师点评:简评:乱访一词可在斟酌,叹人间一处很好,草未清一段待商榷。收笔句还好。表意上略显瑕疵。
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鸿鹄豪情老师点评:简评:起笔还好,承句进一步扣题。后面续写中规中矩,无大错,亦无佳。扣题算不上太精确,表达深度不足,情语过多。
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