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古典诗十八期春雷组第二十二讲作业帖 |
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浅评:中二句失粘,转句平仄有误
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浅评:以“人间四月芳菲尽,山寺桃花始盛开。为意题绝一首,且笔者题为山寺桃花,承句的盆地一词应再酌,那么转句的景象不妥了此句大有题冬之景象,合句意复前二句景了
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