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古典诗十七.五律第19讲冬组作业帖 |
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小诗首联让人眼前一亮,写的很不错,紧扣棉花特点,赞。颔联承接的不算太好,入情太快,反显突兀。颈联与棉花关联比较紧,还是不错的。尾联呵呵句不太理解。作者对咏物诗写作要领已知晓,但衔接关联还需加油!
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