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古典诗十八第十四讲春雷组作业贴 |
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问好诗友!此律脉络清晰,层次分明,布局合理,回味悠长。不错,值得点赞!只是觉得颈联下分句前二后三有点牵强,另外,尾联结句“月斜窗”力不足以托起全篇。以上只是个见,以供墨寒老师参考。
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