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古典诗十七基础第12讲冬组作业帖 |
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问好学友,诗题为〈秀色可餐〉但遍篇在写鱼,跑题了。
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问好学友,小诗格律无误,但空洞无品味,老干体。首句苦读征有凑韵之嫌,合句“踔厉’’则雄健丶奋发,与奋力耕意同,
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