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古典词十九初级班采莲组第十讲作业 |
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下阙句式弱了,不知表达什么,还算流畅
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问好诗友,词的上阙尚可,下阙读来有些牵强寄事了
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问好诗友,重阳寄怀思亲,情感有致,文语倍佳,有读家书之感,若诗友精修细酌可是一首不错之词,加油。
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