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古典词十八期创作班【幽兰组】第十七讲作业贴 |
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点评:脉络较清晰,上阙写景,下阙写情。今生(今宵)梦里(想得。总体尚可。)
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点评:脉络清晰,立意明确。对偶挺好,洗(映),牵(穿)总体尚好。尾句以景含情。蕴藉
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