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问好学友,格律正确!首联入题,二联拓展千里湿、四方围,表现南方春雨的充足。三联有点累赘,尾联出彩!
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问好学友,格律正确!好诗!首联“偷”字用的好,更能表现春雨贵如油!二联承接写春雨的状态,是梦、非愁更加生动!三联转的恰到好处,尾联出彩!好诗!赞!学习了!
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