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古典词十八初级班第四讲紫竹组作业贴 |
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问好学友。此篇格律正确,合乎章法。上片由风景渐至人事,过片衔接紧密,对仗工稳。结句由实转虚,回扣主题。上片东风、新春,意象略泛,整体不错。继续加油!
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问好学友。格律无误。上片由点到面,板凳体用小院收拢。用春回重了些,毕竟年关未至。过片对偶工整,选景典型,结句升华。总体不错,继续加油!
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