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古典词十六期初级班第十二讲疏影组作业贴 |
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问好紫玉清涵,词格韵部无误。整首词冬末感怀情景交融,感怀至深,铺排到位,衔接自然流畅,仿古味很浓,学习了
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问好岸芷汀兰,韵部无误,词格多处出律,袭,出,独,境。清字重复,修改一下。整首词写出了莲的神韵与风格,不错。上下阙煞尾五字偶句不工稳。整首词文脉清晰,意思完整,多读几次就会发现不足,稍作修改会不错的,
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