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古典诗十一期七律第八讲秋组作业贴: |
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问好看月,首联颔联写的好,颈联的喧杂,群声沸,嬉闹,意思太近了,有合掌之嫌,尾联结的也不错,一首好作品,拜读学习了!
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问好大陈组长,前三联都在写暴雨之前,占用的笔墨太多了,只是在第七句轻描淡写的写了暴雨,感觉有点儿本末倒置了,前三联再斟酌吧!一家之言哈!
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