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问好玉儿,首联的桃红杏白,取一即可。颔联梦字再想想,入情别太早,后两联写的还可以。韵字再看看吧!两个空字,浓,是二冬韵!
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问好思远人,首联的湖光和颔联的绿红离得有点儿远了,首联可以提一下汀州啥的,颈联的晴字再想想,首联微雨了,尾联写的挺好,樵字再想想,鸥鹭,都是水鸟,还是以水上生活为主吧!
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