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古典十三期创作班第四讲驼云组作业贴,评阅老师,香山红叶(双层)倚楼听风雨(单.... |
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问好无影!上下片有些脱了,上片咏梅,下片的可怜人破坏了画面感啊,个见!
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问好天空!此词填的蛮好!有着“近乡情更怯”的既视感,起拍很美,学习了!
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问好乙诺!“雁”字出律了。下片用了典,赞一个!
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