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简评:细读佳作两遍,此作品从头到尾栩栩如生,引读者怜惜,读之感人,品之有味,唯铅华二字牵强!学习佳作!
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简评:细读佳作两遍,作者起拍为景,立意不错,唯不足又是一年这几个字受了时间的约束!对仗句尚可,看结句没有达到预期的效果,首尾呼应欠佳,结的不大到位!
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