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古典诗十一第十讲春组作业贴: |
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点评
你好楚芳,感觉你进步好快,现在写的有模有样的,起承转合没有问题,青帐/绳床/卧倦身,个人觉得前四字留两个即可,有点浪费了,一缕荷香/澄/晚月。澄字用的不是太到位,个见哈,
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