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问候词友!作业写的不错。意脉流畅,词句典雅。惟觉起拍有问题:年光暮。由年光到小草萌芽,时空跨度有点大。个见仅供参考!
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问候词友!作业由雪后起笔,到黄莺嬉闹,一派祥和的春光。上结有些凑韵,黄莺敢把栖鸦惹恼?不过也别有一番风味。下片仿写得挺好!学习了!
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问候词友!作业布局合理!起拍春意浓浓,歇拍人物出场。为过片做好铺垫。过片入情。结拍回扣主题。学习佳作!
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