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古典楹联十六青山组第二十九讲作业贴 | 
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对句指代不明,出句是隐藏我(主语),对句偷换主语啦 
 
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对句前四后三关联不够紧密,还可以更好哦。 
 
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有点对字的赶脚,对句与出句情感色调不一致,再练。 
 
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对句平仄正确,句子通顺,但立意还须再酌。 
 
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对句可以,再接再厉 
 
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后三有点对字了,还可再酌 
 
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