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对句很好,尤喜第二句。赞!小词写得也不错,对偶句稍欠些,可再斟酌!初评,如有不当之处请原谅!
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对句平仄对了,意境差些,水浅与淡泊没什么关系,继续努力哈!小词读来很顺,中间对偶句能为最后一句做好充分的铺垫就好了,可再斟酌,个见哈!
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