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古典词十三期创作班第十七讲驼云组作业,单层/清澜,双层/苍穹 |
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问好作者,本篇整体看了一下,肿么有种哭天喊地感觉,遣词造句也是让人费解,是想写壮志未酬吗?还有煞尾,先世的恩情犹记呼?有点诡异了,澜才疏学浅浅见勿怪了!
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