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点评:首联第二句改一下饮在什么泉,查一个泉字的名,不用加上湖字。颔联意思想写龙腾云驾雾吧,在表达上欠缺一点火候,我们都没见到龙,只是用的虚景,驾雾三千尺,行踪一缕烟。颈联也没表达好,我个人见解,春时调
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