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问好学友!本诗格律用韵无误。首联直奔主题,时间地点特色简明扼要。颔联对仗工整,但是下分句孤平了,以后注意。颈联不错,描述更递进一步。对仗也很工稳。尾联回扣主题,总领全诗。感觉稍白话了点。整体不错!...
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