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问好贝贝姐,这首律,首联还不错哈,统领全篇,颔联和颈联,最好接着文明往下来写,尾联有回扣,但是有些牵强哈,布局和立意上,还需要加强些哈
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问好诗友,这首作品,无论是咏物,还是通过火来生发,我都没读出来和火有关的信息,再好好考虑一下吧,推倒重来好不好
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