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问好青云:见笔力,点赞👍。不足之处尾联荡开一笔,转了出去,可再斟酌,和前面相比弱了,韵律自检哈。
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问好杜友:优点略过哈,二联飞燕水烟不是重阳的意象,三联对仗词与意还需斟酌,四联念君切,缺少铺垫,突兀了。个见哈
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