2791| 42
|
词十七初级班第十六讲驭风组作业贴 |
| ||
| ||
| ||
点评
怀乡之作,一二两个意群不错。三四意群佳人的出现与人老不是很恰当,到底谁在望家乡要分明,流泪的肯定是佳人,思念者又何以得知呢,所以笔者在此处要清楚。此处的转结一定要合情合理。个人看法不一定对,勿怪!
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
|Archiver|手机版|小黑屋|古典听风书院 ( 蜀ICP备15023305号-1 )
GMT+8, 2025-1-3 10:05 , Processed in 0.140625 second(s), 25 queries .
Powered by Discuz! X3.2 Licensed
© 2001-2013 Comsenz Inc.