2770| 13
|
古典诗十一期七绝第十五讲夏组作业贴: |
| ||
点评
问好听雨!整体见流畅,遣词谋篇,新意尚不足。个见
| ||
点评
问好冷月!风又雨的话,能见得星月否?愁听/和泪念,建议取其一足矣;故情感况味,宜着场境而渲染,凭物象而寄托,得其婉曲,始堪余味,个见。
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
|Archiver|手机版|小黑屋|古典听风书院 ( 蜀ICP备15023305号-1 )
GMT+8, 2024-12-23 15:59 , Processed in 0.125645 second(s), 22 queries .
Powered by Discuz! X3.2 Licensed
© 2001-2013 Comsenz Inc.