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问好诗友!这首词是想仿写那首也无风雨也无晴吧,说几处明显的毛病:美团的士抢了主人公的镜, 醒来的无缘由,前面长桥车马后面河提烟柳,后俩拍也是缺乏逻辑性和连贯性 。不怕仿写,要仿明白仿的合情合理方是高仿
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