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古典十三期创作班浮槎组第三讲作业贴,评阅老师:锦色(单层)烟雨阁(双层) |
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问好仙子,上片感情渲染过于厚重,婉约些为宜。风暴也无可取之处。更有关山只在一方,南北西东扯远了。下片七字句没有承接,显得嘎然而断,亦可细酌。个见。
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