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古典联十一清新组第二十讲作业贴(评阅老师—英子) | 
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问好南国红叶,一题对句,断再炼,二题,杨柳对当歌再炼 
 
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问好清风秋月,对句一,漂亮,对句二好看,学习了 
 
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问好风与雪,对句一可以,对句二可以 
 
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问好沉默,对句一可以,对句二再炼,后三节奏不对 
 
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问好极北之北,对句一漂亮,对句二可以,学习了 
 
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问好暖阳,对句一好看,对句二漂亮,学习了 
 
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问好如烟,对句一后三再炼,对句二可以 
 
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问好谷韵,对句一好看,对句二可以 
 
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问好笑语盈然,对句一好看,对句二漂亮,学习了 
 
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