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问好学友,小诗开篇诉年关差不多到了疫情还那么严重,颌联紧承首联,心绪不宁,但颈联转的不知所向,费解,尾联扣回,但扫病清有些口语化了,有凑韵嫌疑,个见,
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问好学友!全诗格律用韵无误。叙述形象逼真。吊瓶挂满墙孤平。用词稍显直白了点。布局还行。主题鮮明。整体尚可,继续努力!
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