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问好学友,词格韵部无误。本词基本不错!道尽了人生无奈与对未来岁月的期盼。上下阕衔接的很好!文字功底扎实,就是下阕第四句应该是对偶,写成了排列。前后呼应,词脉相连,意境用词适当。瑕不掩瑜,值得一读,加油
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