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古典词二十二期初级班第十讲清曲组作业贴 |
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本小词写了春夜散步所见所感。文脉清晰,文笔流畅畅,恰当用叠韵,给词增加美感。下片:转眼时光染鬓斑。不悔流年,不负流年。好句子。煞尾句醉也花间,醒也花间。词尽意未尽。个别字再酌,上下片前处和娟均为逗...
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