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古典词二十初级班凌霜组第十二讲作业贴 |
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问好诗友。这首词写得不错。思路清晰。上片,不错,湖边远眺。言辞也比较顺畅。杨柳飘丝新吐绿,这句飘丝吐绿有点浪费字了。但是景安排的不错。下片,写远望,露出思乡之情,自然。下片比较流畅。不错。
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