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古典词十七创作班第十五讲驭风组作业贴 |
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问好学友,词格韵部无误。很不错的一阕词,上景下情,情景交融。脉络清晰,衔接自然,词味浓浓,上下阕四字句对偶工稳,情景铺排有序,娓娓道来,唯煞尾句,画夏夜风光,句式结构应为:212。稍作修改更好了。
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