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词十五初级班第十三讲易安组作业贴,评阅老师:墨问5-20、小溪剩余楼层 |
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问好学友。未较验格律哦,一应为平。整首词的章法不错,情景交融,上下结意思不错,后三字可再斟酌修改一下。建议多阅读,词味偏淡。加油
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