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问好滴水莲同学,全诗格律正确,遣词造句非常合理。中二联对仗工整,转接自然,写的很好
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问好青松同学,全诗格律正确,层次清楚。个别遣词还可再斟酌,如百里可改为院里。戏万家改为落万家。颈联对仗不工。个见
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问好雨后彩虹同学,全诗格律基本正确,抒字出律。层次分明。对仗工整。写得很好
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