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诗友好:诗作围绕诗题娓娓道来,虚实结合不错。首联两句半醉半醒,思念旧识,令人感叹。尾联上分句有些淡薄,没有拉开时间距离,结句暮春时节杨花染鬓就多少有些勉强了。个见,多谅啊!
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诗友好:欣赏诗作,怀念伊人,一往情深。虚实结合,层层递进。尾联上分句很有意境,结句“一樽倾”有些生硬,是不是缺点柔情啊?多谅!
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